Saturday, November 12, 2011

Together


So long has it been, so very long..
From the moment of coexistence
To this moment of weariness, we debate
Weren’t we bound with harmonious hope
Or was it an enlightening war from the start?

Felt a lurking pleasure to see your agony,
And gloated, for I am beyond mortal pain
I inflict upon you, the physical existence
By my power the senses, greed and desire
Yet I am pained!, I suffer! When you do..

I, the immortal force inside you, could feel earth,
So, let us burn together in this green hell
and rejoice, with remains washed away
There might be hope to glitter in and out
Or to subsist as charred remains of a distant existence

Better to perish once than
degrade and disintegrate every moment
my exquisite frame of life, join me,
Reconcile once more, like in the verge of birth
together let us know the unknown to be eternally unborn

26 comments:

  1. Good work..A very different kind of topic choice for a poem.
    Tc

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  2. very well written Krishnapriya :)

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  3. "together let us know the unknown to be eternally unborn"....terrific! A lot many meanings tangled in this single line!

    Apt words and dense thoughts and brilliant execution! One of the best pieces!

    Regards and love KP:-)

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  4. Beautiful...especially the last line:)

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  5. Hi Rahul - thank you!!

    Hey SUB - thanks a lot..!!

    Hey Nasnin - oh thanks dear.. that was my fav line too!!

    Hi Chitra - thank you! :)

    Hello Cloud nine - thanks dear..

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  6. Brilliant writing! Much to immerse one's self in here! I especially loved the last two lines :)

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  7. Thank you! Fiona.. am very delighted with your comment!!

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  8. Yes, I agree with Magiceye. This was powerful, in depth and in richness!

    Leo @ I Rhyme Without Reason

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  9. Hey Magiceye - thank you!

    Hi Leo - Thanks a lot!! :)

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  10. Great writing KP!
    "I, the immortal force inside you, could feel earth,
    So, let us burn together in this green hell
    and rejoice, with remains washed away"

    My favorite lines.. Kudos for sharing brilliant piece of works!!

    Cheers,
    Anand.

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  11. Well written KP.. profound!!! :)

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  12. Amazing..!
    I didn't know that it was such a pleasure being unborn..
    I loved each and every line you wrote..

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  13. It feels like each words came for the stir of your soul. Lovely.

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  14. 'me' and 'myself'!
    Good one KP and your thoughts are so profound that at first reading it went over my head:)
    Lots more to decipher, I suppose!
    Good Luck dear KP and keep writing.. I love to read you:)

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  15. What better than the union of soul and body working harmoniously!

    To know our inner self. Wonderfully crafted KP
    :)

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  16. Good one Kp! Loved the way u have worded!

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  17. Hey Anand - Thank you.. that is one of my fav too!!

    Hi Dee - Thank you!

    Hello Alcina - Thnaks and it would be a pleasure, only when the scerect is known and then unborn.. :)

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  18. Hi Sameera - Thank you Dear!!! :)

    Hi Pygma - How can i express the happinees when some one gets to understand it the same way as me!

    Hey Shekar - Thank you! :)

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  19. Hello Beyond Horizon - Have I given you my eyes.. for you found the same meaning that I dwelled with - Thank you!

    Hey Sahana - Loved your comment! thanks dear..!

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  20. Good lines! Loved the "to be eternally unborn".

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  21. Krishnapriya, you always write heavy stuff that are tinged with metaphysical and philosophical slants.Manytimes they are over my head but I enjoy your beautiful play of words

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  22. Hi Ahimaaz - It should be should it? I always feel so.. but "being eternally unborn" comes after knowing eternal secrets I guess..!! :)

    Hi Partha - Ha ha!! thank you I am obliged.. and you always find ways to make me happy!!

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  23. Hi..!
    I just stumbled upon your blog..
    This poem is so beautiful..
    I specially loved these lines.. 'From the moment of coexistence
    To this moment of weariness, we debate
    Weren’t we bound with harmonious hope
    Or was it an enlightening war from the start?'
    great! :)

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